Blog #13

For this blog, I decided to look at Chapter 11 from “They Say, I Say.” I incorporated the suggested revision techniques throughout most of my essay. I chose this chapter because once I got to a certain point in my revisions, I was not too sure what else I should do, I just knew that I could make it better. In this chapter, it gave a bunch of questions as to what I may have done or hadn’t done. I went through this checklist and made some changes. I’ll give two examples of what I did. The first suggestion that stood out to me in the chapter was when it recommended to “check the verbs” in my essay when introducing a quote. I changed “the authors explain” in my second paragraph to “the authors assert” so that it is understood that the author is putting forth their ideas in the quote I embedded. The second suggestion that I used was “can your readers follow your argument from one sentence and paragraph to the next.” I cannot really post the change I made for this, but I will explain it. I completely rearranged the order of my paragraphs so that there was a more logical flow and broke one paragraph into two parts. I did this because after rearranging the paragraphs, it made sense when reading the entire essay and did not seem super choppy. Without reading this suggestion, I would have had no idea how to improve my flow, so I’m glad it was something as simple as printing the essay out, cutting individual paragraphs out, and manipulating the order they were in. There are some other changes that I still plan to make and that I made while going through this chapter, so I hope that it all turns out great!